First Day Of High School
It was my first day of high school,I thanked the bus driver and hopped off the bus. my hands started to shake and I began to breath heavily, so I started to fidget with my blazer. I Slowly walked to class, not making eye contact with other students. I arrived to my first class, the bell rang right in time,and I decided to sit at the back of the class.
W.A.L.T... Use Show Not Tell
This week we used show not tell in our writing. We chose a feeling an used show not tell to explain that feeling.
What did you infer from reading my writing?
What I found easy: Thinking of a feeling
What I found hard: Writing it without telling what the feeling is
What I could do next time: Add more sentences
Hi Nathan, I liked how you described about your first day of high school. I also like how you said 'I began to breath heavily' and it tells me that your nervous. Maybe next time you could add more describing word to show not tell. Overall, good job. Keep it up!
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